你的感觉有道理

我写的时候， 有点 folk lore 的感觉， 想着农村小伙， 所以韵压的像顺口溜了。 

调整句子位置， 感觉好些吗？ 谢谢。 

Miles of smile

 

I am trekking the last mile

to see my love’s smile.

Her smiles inspire

my journey through miles of mire.

I bring her a plain tile

inscribed with her beautiful smile.

My love for you, please don’t inquire,

for it will never expire.