针尖压水自无花 - 形象!倒瀑垂帘身影斜 - 此句 “身”字或出律,且动感不足,作“倒瀑飞身柳影斜”如何?
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• 多谢清泉兄点评鼓励!还不能改成“飞身”,因为后面已经有“双飞燕”了。此处倒是用过跳水动作,感觉不合适,就改了,问好! -寒砚- ♀ (0 bytes) () 08/10/2016 postreply 19:16:17
• 多谢清泉兄点评鼓励!还不能改成“飞身”,因为后面已经有“双飞燕”了。此处倒是用过跳水动作,感觉不合适,就改了,问好! -寒砚- ♀ (0 bytes) () 08/10/2016 postreply 19:16:17
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