全诗除颈联外,几乎一赋到底,似没有起兴,意象不足,情深而句纤,特别是“蜄云”和“螺甲”比拟似欠精切,读起来味淡。另外前四句太多与韵脚读音相近的字,“翻”,“蜷”,“垣”,“添”,“惯”,“浅”,似影响音韵之美。个见供参。
全诗除颈联外,几乎一赋到底,似没有起兴,意象不足,情深而句纤,特别是“蜄云”和“螺甲”比拟似欠精切,读起来味淡。另外前四句太多与韵脚读音相近的字,“翻”,“蜷”,“垣”,“添”,“惯”,“浅”,似影响音韵之美。个见供参。
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