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I agree, "寿成终，人去天际，何处寻踪？" needs more adjustment, especially "寿成终". Sounds like repeating.
人去天际 change to 魂去天际,
I am tyring to change "何处寻踪？"to a "。sentence" and it needs more "飘逸" and positive.
Still thinking. Thanks.
At work, so, cannot type in Chinese.