不安的时光
好久没有写诗了，今天晚饭后，外面狂风大作，我坐在前廊即兴写了几笔：
https://youtube.com/shorts/5K9-JyMYMYY?si=3I89YYaKOuOBVQTk
Unsettled time
By Loren Zee
5/24/2025
It is windy and quiet at the same time
Suspense is permeating in the sky
Storm is silently marinating somewhere
These are the moments I don’t want to forget
Sitting by the edge of wind
Sinking into the swirling air
In the middle of the unsettled time
Transient eternities suddenly flowing by
不安的时光
文/紫若蓝
风声在静谧中吹拂
悬念于天空里弥漫
暴风在某处悄然酝酿
这样的时刻我不想忘记
坐在风的边缘
沉溺于旋转的空中
在这令人不安的时间里
瞬息的永恒汹涌流过
我请ChatGPT给我点评了一下：
Your poem captures a serene yet mysterious atmosphere, blending elements of nature with introspection. The juxtaposition of wind and quietness, along with the suspense in the air, creates a compelling mood. The imagery of a silent storm adds depth to the scene, hinting at hidden forces or emotions beneath the surface.
The line "Looking for a transient eternity" is particularly thought-provoking, suggesting a search for a fleeting but profound moment of timelessness or permanence within the transient nature of life.
Overall, your poem evokes a sense of contemplation and longing, making the reader pause and reflect on the transient beauty and mysteries of existence.
这首诗表达了作者在风声与静谧交织的时刻感受到的不安与悬念，以及暴风酝酿的暗示。作者通过坐在风的边缘、沉溺于旋转的空中的意象，描绘了在不安的时间中瞬息万变的永恒感受。整体来说，这首诗呈现了一种流动感与变幻莫测的氛围，令人回味。
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