Improved!

By slowing the reading pace, you sound clearer and clearer. The vowels have big improvement too.

There are a few words which you might double check:

Late sounds like /li:t/ rather that /leit/ and same as rain.

Shout sounds like /sh/\t/ rather that /shaut/

There are some consonants missing at the end.

Just my two cents.

Lets day day up.