地道美国人改的，对还是不对？

这是我的笨拙原文：

The marching crowd somehow slowed down. I saw a long beard Santa Claus in his red suit and red hat with white fuzz.  He waved to the crowd while handing over coupons to them.

这是老美的道地英文：

The crowd seemed to part and slow just enough to see a Santa Claus with a long white beard. He had a beautiful red suit and really looked the part. He waved to the shoppers while handing out coupons.

可是加粗的那些我实在不能肯定是否正确；就算正确也不晓得是什么意思。哪位有什么看法？谢谢！