One step closer ： 英诗汉译 SUBJECT, VERB, OBJECT by James Richardson

I got a chance to think this over while driving to another state last weekend.  I think that I am one step closer to what James Richardson put in his poem. 

I have been fumbling in my translation and interpretation of this poem.  The discussions helped me a lot.  I picked up some from LinMu's translation, from 京燕有关Caesar的解释。  This is my learning process。  I thank for the discussions。  I still open to discussion。

If you are interested in my modified translation you can follow the link:  http://bbs.wenxuecity.com/mysj/193948.html.  I put a note there to explain my interpretation.