小曼,节日快乐,愿你写出更多的佳作,祝你晚安好梦。
小曼,很惭愧,我不懂诗词格律的平平仄仄, 也不懂英诗的ABABCDCDEFEFGG格式,但是我颇为欣赏你这首童年的诗歌,把童年和时间的快慢来对比,多么新颖独特呀。你把童年快乐的时光也描绘的栩栩如生,尤其是结尾,是点睛之笔。
"It is Time! That can't make me go back to nine,
But it can bring me two-thousand-year-old wine!"
也佩服你的英语,地道流畅。