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你有的地方断句多(意群分得太多),这样对句子的整体性有破坏作用。例如第一句,你分了三个片断(segment),如果连成一起,把这个句子读成一起,应该显得更顺畅;尤其是下面跟着有好多句子的时候。
There was music | from my neighbor’s house | through the summer nights.
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There was music from my neighbor’s house through the summer nights.
你有的地方断句多(意群分得太多),这样对句子的整体性有破坏作用。例如第一句,你分了三个片断(segment),如果连成一起,把这个句子读成一起,应该显得更顺畅;尤其是下面跟着有好多句子的时候。
There was music | from my neighbor’s house | through the summer nights.
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There was music from my neighbor’s house through the summer nights.