坚持就是胜利！小蔓！

没有时间多看，只看了第一段，我觉得我会这样写，简练一点儿。 不一定对，你批判地采纳。

My purpose of learning English is to communicate with my clients and my boss fluently with less misunderstanding.  The ways I have tried to reach my goal include improving my skills in reading, writing, intonation and  pronunciation, as well as learning useful expressions  by talking with native English Speakers. 

My purpose of learning English is that I hope I could communicate with my clients and my boss fluently with  less misunderstandings.  The ways I have tried to reach my purpose are, beside  improving my skills in reading, writing, intonations and  pronunciations, I  also  manage to learn expressions  via talking with native English Speakers.