用 your 更能让读者看出诗人对蜀相的敬意

The Premier of Shu Kingdom

Where to seek for the temple of the premier?

Outside JinGuan Town with cypresses so lush.

Green grass on steps reflects the color of spring;

Orioles beyond leaves have vain sweet warbling.

Three visits to bother him for tactics in affairs under heaven;

Heart of old courtier on starting the dynasty of two generations. 

这两句需要联在一起吧？  平衡一下，把后面的两朝搬到前面来：Two generations of the dynasty were started under  your  whole-hearted assistance   (用your 表达出诗人对蜀相的敬意）

But he died before the army gained victory,

Which makes heroes wet gown fronts with tears.  ？ （襟：lapel, turndown, turndown collar, revers)