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The strategies for minimizing negative impacts of shift work depend on how thoroughly a shift worker understands the impacts, how effectively a shift worker makes adjustments, and how strongly a shift worker attains supports from families, friends and coworkers

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The strategies for minimizing negative impacts of shift work depend on a thorough understanding of the impacts, effective adjustments being made, and a strong supporting from families, friends and coworkers.

Like your references, very clear to readers