I had a hectic day yesterday, and

was unable to make comments on your writing in the morning.   Nothing is wrong with “swarm”. 只是觉得句子结构不太好 (maybe it is just me).

 妹妹这篇文章内容语言都很好。只是觉得组织的不太好 (我跟妹妹就不玩客气了). 受妹妹启发，我也想写写关于 “identity” 的东东，不过是从完全不同的角度。