不好意思来晚了，这几天上午晚上都上课，比较忙。

我的建议请参考。总得来说非常帮，应该是一气呵成写成的，flow很流畅。看了你近来的两篇习作，觉得用代词指代方面，你可以注意一下。内容方面也很好，吸引读者。

 

The Internet is a wonderful place （作为篇首第一段话的第一句，这个a wonderful place 太泛泛了，可以具体往你后面的内容引一下）. It （代词问题，it你指代的是什么？而且后面有mall也有人，对不上前面的internet或者place，所以it指代不清）can be anything from a gigantic shopping mall with endless sales, to an ultimate wise （不确定wise的精细意思在这里用是否合适，wise是智慧的，knowledgeable是不是更好？）man who knows about anything （everything和anything哪个更好，还是通用？我不确定）. Besides, it can also be a club/forum, a library, a theater, （and 或者or） a playground,. tThe list can go on and on.  I have absolutely fallen in love with it at （不确定是否要加个the or a）first sight （根据我的esl老师说，如果你有了at the first sight限定时间，所以不能用完成时，要用过去时）and have never parted with it ever since.

As an old hand (a veteran) of Internet surfing, I have gradually developed a favorite list of my own. It might be a boring list to many of you, but each one of them（代词指代不清） on the list has its own charm to me. In next （the following 或next several）paragraphs I would tell you the useful and healthy (healthy形容网站不合适，how about salutary, I just looked it up) ones, but I would also try to keep you away from harm(out of the harm's way), which means I won’t disclose (我会用include) those that are most addictive. In fact, I stopped going to those sites myself long time ago. :-)

disclose: 侧重指揭露或泄露鲜为人知或保密的事。
expose: 多指揭露丑闻、坏人坏事或各种阴谋。也可指某物暴露在外。
uncover: 主要指移去遮盖物，让东西显露出来。也可指揭露阴谋、秘密等。
reveal: 多指揭露一直隐藏或隐秘的东西，或揭示超乎常人理解能力的真理。

Nowadays, the first thing I would do every work day is to read through the tech blogs I nicely (diligently)/( have neatly) collected on （介词不确定是否正确）my google homepage. They not only keep me at (the bleeding edge of) (current/abreast with) technologies, but also enable me bragging (to brag) about them to pretend to be   (so as to be seen as) a guru in front of my colleagues.

During work, I would skim through financial sites and blogs to watch stock prices, and read about the stock market whenever possible.  Without （an？）exception, I also dream about hitting (the) jackpot on stock market someday and retiring on a sunny beach soon,. bBut that dream is fading away every day with the corruption (spiral down) of the American financial and banking system. What a shame! I could write a whole series of articles if I want to vent my anger on(over) wall street.

After work, besides MYSJ and Youtube, the most frequented（ly） （visited /used？）links from my bookmark(s) recently are several fashion blogs (here is one I visited the most - http://www.extrapetite.com). I love those blogs because the bloggers are in the same petite figure as me. They post pictures and write insightful reviews about their new findings, as well as spreading the latest sales information. More importantly, they all write in English. I can learn a great deal of （note： slangy) (many) (useful)(fancy? vivid? idiamatic？) words and phrases about fashion and apparel, which will come in handy when I want to do girl talk with my female colleagues. I have been reading these blogs for a month now, and I will surely continue doing so.

Everyone knows now that MYSJ is my new addiction and I have been flooding(hosting) this forum as you all see it . Youtube is my only source of Chinese TV show because I have cancelled all my TV channels(subscriptions)（cable service）. These two have been discussed here by 99 and me, so I would simply stop here.

Thanks for reading. Looking forward to hearing about your own gems found on Internet.

Bricks  are welcome as always