With rhyme and reason, music and poetry are two sides of the same coin. They complement each other.
You've just made my day by mentioning a traditional Chinese poem of mine. For this, I can't thank you enough.
I recall the day and time when I got your comments on my poem that you quoted above. To say I was a bit shocked is an understatement. But then the poetry forum is open to everyone. As a contributor, I, therefore, should also be open to feedback as colorful as yours. I think I did fine.
Thankfully, Evergreen Pine has kindly given me a heads-up about this piece of creative music of yours. You have a style, which means quite a lot to your audience.
Wishing you every success!