初学写词：减字木兰花（读《白香词谱》仿押王安国韵)

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减字木兰花 （红灯停处邂风情）　彩云舒
马龙车水，灯点绛唇绯撩起。对目销魂，欢曲双车巧互闻。
眉梢送语，惹多少春风过去。绿唤车扬，悦笑风流又何妨？

减字木兰花 （春情） - [宋] 王安国
画桥流水，雨湿落红飞不起。月破黄昏，帘里余香马上闻。
徘徊不语，今夜梦魂何处去。不似垂杨，犹解飞花入洞房。

[红灯邂风情]题解：上个周五下班驱车回家路上，一抹夕阳，晚风拂煦，想到周末不上班了，有种说不出来的轻狂，车里的音乐频道传来Celine Dion的《Drove All Night》那首我百听不厌的情歌，我随声唱着，歌声让我快活得像只飞鸟儿，好个爽快！正巧红灯停下，从旁边一辆敞篷车里也传出同我车里相同频道的歌，那车上的男子和我不由互相对视，好个英俊的男子。说也好怪啊，我俩不约而同地都摘下墨镜，他金发蓝眼，风情地对我一挤眼睛，我呢，正唱到兴头处，也不由地飞给他个媚眼，接着一个飞吻过来。。。绿灯一换，我笑着一踩油门，车飞也似地向前方驶去，风舞弄着我的长发。。。

注1：白香词谱中《减字木兰花》的词律：
仄平平△ 仄仄仄平平仄△ 仄仄平○ 平仄平平仄仄○
平平仄▲ 平平仄平平仄▲ 仄仄平● 平仄平平仄仄●
(平为平可仄，仄为仄可平，△和▲为仄韵，○和●为平韵)

注2：《减字木兰花》，又名《减兰》、《天下乐令》、《木兰香》等。双调小令。四十四字，每两句话一转韵，共四仄韵，四平韵。

注3：平仄按照现代汉语的四声发音而定，第一声、第二声为平声；第三声、第四声为仄声。

注4：下面是我几年前在走廊和歌坛曾发过的歌贴:Celine Dion演唱的《IDrove All Night》

I Drive All Night

I had to escape
The city was sticky and cruel
Maybe I should have called you first
But I was dying to get to you
I was dreaming while I drove
The long straight road ahead, uh, huh

Could taste your sweet kisses
Your arms open wide
This fever for you is just burning me up inside

I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Woke you from your sleep
To make love to you
Is that alright
I drove all night

What in this world
Keeps us from falling apart
No matter where I go I hear
The beating of our one heart
I think about you
When the night is cold and dark
No one can move me
The way that you do
Nothing erases this feeling between me and you

I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Woke you from your sleep
To make love to you
Is that alright
I drove all night

Could taste your sweet kisses
Your arms open wide
This fever for you is just burning me up inside

I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Is that alright

I drove all night
I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Woke you from your sleep