好。我帮.不谢。read inside

秋 夜 随 感

露凝寒气重，
更静明月空。空 – 松
独有幽思客，
轻吟忆故钟。钟 - 兄， or
盅 (if you are a man) 公 (if you are a woman, hehe, joking)

My dear friend,

I like the 意境 in your poem. I am not among the best poets here but I am one of the nicest guys here who is willing to help. Do not thank me if you like my suggestions. Just write another poem.

2ndglance








这首小诗如何复,请各位帮忙.谢谢
文章来源: 一惜三惜 于 2004-07-22 23:18:12



秋 夜 随 感

露凝寒气重， 更静月空明。

独有幽思客， 轻吟时暂停。