赞！第五段和前面叙事人似乎换了。前面是男主说的，这一段又像女主说。改用“他”和“她”更好。

来源: 60MPH 于 2025-12-06 09:42:36 [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 本文已被阅读：次

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