Best work written in English by one of us

The best work I have seen is the "50感怀” by NewVoice. Besides the easy flow of the composition and the depth of thought conveyed, what impresses me the most is how closely the writer resembles the native speakers in the logic and the manner of presentation. It usually doesn't take more than a brief glance to find many language problems in a work posted on this forum, but I had to read very attentively to only find some possible defects. For example:
1. " I felt resentful and helplessness when I noticed what happened to my physical being over the last decade, gray hair slowly and silently creeping upon me, the skin, I was once proudest of, literally turning from blemish-free peach skin to potato skin."
=>I felt resentful and helpless when I noticed what happened to my physical being over the last decade: gray hair slowly and silently crept upon me, and the skin, which I was once proudest of, literally turned from blemish-free peach pink to coarse potato brown.
2. "It sure felt good to walk on a springy track, the sun shining softly and breeze blowing gently."
=>It sure felt good to walk on a springy track with the sun shining softly and breeze blowing gently.
3. "She told me that she just started to take guitar lessons as well as spend 15 minutes writing each day. "
=>She told me that she just started to take guitar lessons and spend 15 minutes writing each day.

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• "also" is usually optional; but better not to use it in my case. -小钊- ♂ (125 bytes) () 08/03/2013 postreply 12:40:07

• I like reading; besides, I also like writing -wtl- ♀ (11 bytes) () 08/03/2013 postreply 17:05:16

• you must have found the sentence -wtl- ♀ (228 bytes) () 08/04/2013 postreply 13:19:47

• Being an American I don't eat tofu -wtl- ♀ (99 bytes) () 08/04/2013 postreply 17:14:59

• Sorry, I can't help it. -hammerheadshark- ♀ (239 bytes) () 08/03/2013 postreply 17:46:53

• 回复：Sorry, I can't help it. -小钊- ♂ (227 bytes) () 08/04/2013 postreply 12:26:21

• Ok, then laugh with me. Don't be shy. -hammerheadshark- ♀ (0 bytes) () 08/05/2013 postreply 18:19:55

• Language problems -hammerheadshark- ♀ (2525 bytes) () 08/03/2013 postreply 18:34:35

• 回复：Language problems -小钊- ♂ (1861 bytes) () 08/04/2013 postreply 12:16:25

• Ok, forget what I said, -hammerheadshark- ♀ (245 bytes) () 08/05/2013 postreply 18:24:56

• The Absolute Participial Construction -聚曦亭- ♀ (576 bytes) () 08/04/2013 postreply 04:19:20

• 回复：The Absolute Participial Construction -小钊- ♂ (93 bytes) () 08/04/2013 postreply 12:19:58

• I think he was giving you some examples -hammerheadshark- ♀ (463 bytes) () 08/05/2013 postreply 18:17:26