君之詩,情真而語不真。

来源: 中间小谢 2024-05-03 23:37:43 [] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 本文已被阅读: 次 (387 bytes)
回答: 谢谢心中的城市沙漠黄昏2024-05-03 11:58:21

吾今夜真情大放送,什麽都實話實説。

The last line of this verse is very good, and I like it a lot. Yet the rest is so conventional. I think you will need to nourish a language more personal and truer to yourself.

I think the 真情 in your writing is a very good thing. Many writers fake things.

Hope you don't mind my comments.

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