【荒野】遵鳅儿意见，修改版在此。仍不满意。谢鳅儿阿童二才女！

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Desert Places
荒野
by Robert Frost
(谢谢鳅儿批评指正。批评使人进步，是否译的好些？
也谢阿童意译！）

雪降得快，夜降得快，噢，很快，

降在我看着的、正走过的野外，

而地面几乎被雪填平覆盖，

只有些野草和残枝最后还在摇摆。

环绕的林木拥有它—它们是它的归属。

所有的动物都被堵隔在它们的洞穴。

我太缺乏精力，以致我无法细数；

这孤独包括了我，竟没被察觉。

且孤独的，它仿佛是那种孤独呀

在它变少之前，它一定先要增加

那夜幕下的雪披着空洞的苍白

没有表情，没有什么东西需要表达。

用星与星之间的空旷的空间，他们

吓不着我，—人类不会在星星上生活。

在我心深处我拥有它，离家如此更近

我自己的荒野使我自己惊慌失措。

Snow falling and night falling fast, oh,

fast In a field I looked into going past,

And the ground almost covered smooth in snow,

But a few weeds and stubble showing last.
The woods around it have it--it is theirs.

All animals are smothered in their lairs.

I am too absent-spirited to count;

The loneliness includes me unawares.
And lonely as it is that loneliness

Will be more lonely ere it will be less--

A blanker whiteness of benighted snow

With no expression, nothing to express.
They cannot scare me with their empty spaces

Between stars--on stars where no human race is.

I have it in me so much nearer home To scare myself with my own desert places.

Desert Places 原野 by Robert Frost 弗罗斯特

（阿童牧木译）
Snow falling and night falling fast, oh, fast

In a field I looked into going past,

And the ground almost covered smooth in snow,

But a few weeds and stubble showing last.
雪轻轻的飘落

夜幕却蓦然沉降，沉降

我在广袤的原野上回望

土地被白茫茫的大雪覆盖

偶尔一两丛枯萎的野草花在风中瑟索
The woods around it have it--it is theirs.

All animals are smothered in their lairs.

I am too absent-spirited to count;

The loneliness includes me unawares.

远方环绕着森森的树林肃穆的伫立

陷入忘我的冥思

动物们仿佛窒息在他们的巢穴里

我像一缕若无的游息在辽阔的天地间逡巡

莫大的孤寂笼罩着四野我渐渐开始迷失
And lonely as it is that loneliness Will be more lonely ere it will be less-- A blanker whiteness of benighted snow With no expression, nothing to express.
孤独本身就像那永恒的寂寞

永远永远都不会改变分毫

白茫茫夜幕下的雪野呀

哪里我可以听见一点点声音哪怕只有一点点？
They cannot scare me with their empty spaces Between stars--on stars where no human race is. I have it in me so much nearer home To scare myself with my own desert places.
不必再用那遥远广袤宇宙
那星于星之间杳无人烟的荒漠空间来吓我
其实那就在我的家园在我的自心里
我早已惊惧地陷入了一个巨大的落寞空间
举步唯艰
。。。
。。。
(阿童牧木译旧版）

永远不要想用那空寂沉默的荒野吓唬我在那浩瀚杳无人烟的广宇那星星璀璨出没的地方我将归向那里那里是我最甜蜜的家园我会被那属于我自己的广袤原野彻底征服

：））））

【荒野】by 弗罗斯特

来源: Yimusanfendi 译（原译）

Desert Places
荒野
by Robert Frost
雪下得好快夜降得好快，噢，好快，在这野外，我看着的、走过的野外，而这地面几乎都被雪平滑地覆盖，只有些野草和残枝在作最后的摇摆。
环绕它的林木拥有它—它属它们。所有的动物都被堵塞在他们的洞穴。我太缺乏精力，以致我无法细数；这孤独包括了我，我竟没有感觉。
且它是孤独的，它仿佛是那种孤独在它变少之前，它会更加孤独那夜幕笼罩下的雪披着空洞的雪白没有表情，没有什么东西需要表述。
他们不能用他们空的空间吓唬我星星之间、星星之上没有人类的种族离家更近在我里面我有那么多孤独用我内在的荒野来使我自己惊惧。
Snow falling and night falling fast, oh, fast In a field I looked into going past, And the ground almost covered smooth in snow, But a few weeds and stubble showing last.
The woods around it have it--it is theirs. All animals are smothered in their lairs. I am too absent-spirited to count; The loneliness includes me unawares.
And lonely as it is that loneliness Will be more lonely ere it will be less-- A blanker whiteness of benighted snow With no expression, nothing to express.
They cannot scare me with their empty spaces Between stars--on stars where no human race is. I have it in me so much nearer home To scare myself with my own desert places.