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前生纵是红尘泪,不枉诗情曾一醉。风烟夜色久孤伶,迷雾晨曦浮小字。
云高飘远心如寄,水阔长流魂若止。韶华戚戚有穷时,不尽苍苍无限意。
• 两片折腰体仄韵小七绝。感觉下片可以蕴藉一些,至少第一个"云"字可以不必用得那么直白。谢谢。 -墨瑞- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/11/2014 postreply 15:36:17
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